Delicate Feelings

It is my first attempt with story-telling... Actually, I already have the full story with 10 chapters but without paths and in my native language. So I will appreciate you all if you will correct me with constructive criticism and a little bit of support. I think I will write 3 chapters and after that, I will consider continuing depends on your support. I don't need money, I have a decent job, maybe it will become my new hobby or weird fetish of my dirty mind)) I hope my English doesn't suck, unlike the characters in this novel, ha-ha.